Thanks for rereading, although this is a little beefier (450 words!). I don’t know why precisely, other than it seemed right to mix up the narrator’s outlook (not preferring one over the other).
love this. my heart breaks a little when i read that you don’t smile anymore (only met you once, and you didn’t smile too much), yet this same heart also expands and nods in agreement. this line, man, it struck me: “ I wore whatever shirt I wanted, however I wanted. And on every street I walked I found men eager to bask in a smile.”
Love that this story was prompted by a Mary g. prompt!
Saw it again read it again ! Good stuff ! In the first paragraph you reverse the east and west in the last example (Sondheim Bowie). Why?
Thanks for rereading, although this is a little beefier (450 words!). I don’t know why precisely, other than it seemed right to mix up the narrator’s outlook (not preferring one over the other).
My p/n meter goes for maintaining the pattern, unless the switch heralds a change (an escalation). Maybe just a personal preference…
excellent point.
love this. my heart breaks a little when i read that you don’t smile anymore (only met you once, and you didn’t smile too much), yet this same heart also expands and nods in agreement. this line, man, it struck me: “ I wore whatever shirt I wanted, however I wanted. And on every street I walked I found men eager to bask in a smile.”